Rather than start a new thread for every review I write, I'm going to make this topic for general critiques and observations on my writing.
Anyway, I would generally prefer this topic to be used for newer reviews. I know a lot of the old crappagory reviews have problems and I don't have time and motivation to fix every one of them now. But I'm trying harder with the newer stuff, so I would appreciate feedback.
Please note that I don't guarantee I'll make corrections to the reviews, but everything will be taken into consideration, and especially for future efforts if I don't change what's currently up there.
Anyway, I probably should have read through my Night Driver review a few more times before I posted it. This paragraph here is problematic:
I'm probably going to change this paragraph when I think of a better way to word it without repeating myself.
Also, minor nitpicking in the Puss n Boots review, but this sentence here:
Anyway, I would generally prefer this topic to be used for newer reviews. I know a lot of the old crappagory reviews have problems and I don't have time and motivation to fix every one of them now. But I'm trying harder with the newer stuff, so I would appreciate feedback.
Please note that I don't guarantee I'll make corrections to the reviews, but everything will be taken into consideration, and especially for future efforts if I don't change what's currently up there.
Anyway, I probably should have read through my Night Driver review a few more times before I posted it. This paragraph here is problematic:
The first sentence of that paragraph immediately follows the line, "After about ten seconds, you'll have already seen everything there is to see", so I'm basically saying the same thing twice in a row. I also already ended a previous paragraph with, " But the harsh reality is, folks, that Night Driver only barely meets the necessary qualifications for being called a "game" and nothing more", so I have "and nothing more" used twice almost in a row.
That, quite literally, is all there is to Night Driver. It's monotonous, pointless, and I'm hard-pressed to figure out the differences between most of the eight settings. It exists to give players something to do with the 2600 Paddle controllers and nothing more.
I'm probably going to change this paragraph when I think of a better way to word it without repeating myself.
Also, minor nitpicking in the Puss n Boots review, but this sentence here:
All of the hype and hoopla surrounding Puss n Boots makes the actual game all the more jaw-dropping in its mediocrity.I could probably get rid of the "All of" in the beginning of that sentence. It's not necessary and I wouldn't be using the word "all" twice in the same sentence.
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